96年學測作文滿分範例

This is a composition from a teacher at another high school.  It was written by a student on the 2007 SAT and got the full score, 20. 

You can have a look at the pictures and tell your own story before you read the model.1.



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Source: 96 SAT English (CEEC)

 

96-sat-composition

If you feel too lazy to download it, just read on.

Spring has transformed the outskirts of the city into paradise.  Sunlight shone upon the earth and the wind  sang softly.  Fresh green grass spread across the hills and valleys like an enormous carpet.  Brilliant flowers of all colors bloomed in the garden.  Sarah, a little girl with a round face like a rose and sparkling black eyes was playing near her home.  She hummed softly to herself and danced in the wind.  Suddenly a movement in the bushes nearby caught her attention.  An orange fur ball with a wriggly tail was peering out at her.  It was a cat.  Kneeling down, she gently called the cat towards her.  It hesitated, but eventually emerged from its hiding place.  Sarah stroked the cat and it mewed affectionately.  Playing with it for a while, Sarah found it the sweetest creature ever known.  As an old child, she often felt lonely as though something was missing in her life.  However being with the cat made her feel as though she found a new companion in life.  Examining the cat, she found no collar on its neck and assumed it to be a stray.  “Poor cat” she thought, “it must be all alone.”  She decided to take it home with her. 

Lifting the cat into her arms, Sarah started home.  She was however unaware of a line of cats following her until she reached her front door.  “Oh well she glanced at them, “it wouldn’t hurt to let them all in for a while.”

The smell of grilled chicken reached Sarah’s nostrils as she entered the house, it was almost supper time and Sarah’s mother greeted her from the kitchen wearing an apron.  Sarah approached her mother and asked her timidly if she could have a cat.  Her mother, though looking disapproved, agreed under the condition that Sarah should take full responsibility of th4e cat.  But as Sarah entered the living room, her happiness changed into horror as she saw the floor dirty with footprints, the sofa scratched and the lamp knocked over.  She was forced to let them all go but decided that she would see them all tomorrow in the hills again.  (359 words)

I've posted a sample compositiion regarding these pictures a year ago.  That's a shorter one.  Just click on the URL and you can read it. 

http://www.tiec.tp.edu.tw/lifetype/post/1130/19609