My Biggest Fear--Three Students' Writing Samples for the 2nd UEE Mock Exam

The following are three essay by students for the 2^nd UEE mock exam held last week, each followed by the word number and its score.  Though there are still some mistakes, all the three are well written.

提示：在每個人的生命中，總有令人感到恐懼的事物。請寫一篇作文。第一段描述對你來說哪一件事物是最令你害怕恐懼的，以及為什麼。第二段說明你如何面對，或是處理它。 (2011 spring, 2^nd mock exam)1.

          As far as I am concerned, giving a speech on stage in front of numerous people is the most horrifying thing of all. When I was 14, because nobody wanted to take part in an English speech contest and plus I was absent from school that, my classmates nominated me to participate it. As a result, in spite of my reluctance, I was compelled to do it. However, to my astonishment, when I was giving my words, my microphone was dead. The silence suddenly broke out and I thereby got caught in a predicament, standing freezed before about 1000 people looking at me. Before long some began to laugh and others let out some sound of woo. Frightened, I really don’t know what to do. With a flushing face, I quickly ran down the stage. Consequently, this bad experience did leave an impact t on me.

 With the intention to overcome my stage fright, I decide to face it. First, I can try to speak to my class as long as I have the opportunity. This can increase my confidence gradually. Then, I will try to perform on stage, playing my guitar as if I were a superstar, when I am provided some chances. And lastly, I’ll challenge myself to another speech contest. As the saying goes, “One should stand up where he or she stumbled.” By and large, by doing so, I can get rid of my fear for delivering some words before people. (244 words) (18)(302黃勁惟)

 

2.

       I am scared to raise my hand in class to ask the teacher a question. I fear that the teacher will feel annoyed by my interruption, and that my classmates may think that my question is too easy, therefore wasting their time. So whenever I have a question, I’d ask classmate who sits next to me, but I found that by answering my question, she would miss out on what the teacher is saying, causing more achademic questions. Upon realizing this dilemma, I set my mind to confront this fear of mine.

      The method I used was to persuade myself to believe that by asking questions in class, the teacher can point out my mistakes and tell me what went wrong, and hopefully, my classmates can learn from my mistakes too. I told myself that maybe another classmate of mine might have the same question, but was too shy to ask it, so by conquering my fear of asking, I would be helping him or her as well. Also, I refused to let myself use the method of “saving the question till after class” because I know that it is just an excuse to avoid facing my fear. After several rounds of self-persuasion, I was able to overcome this fear of mine. (213 words) (17)  (309 張世仁)

  

3.

          The most terrifying thing in the world for me is being alone. When I was about five years old, my mom once left me at home alone when I was sleeping. After I woke up, the sky had been dark. I called my mom’s name several times, but no one answered. The house was so silent that I could even heard the wind blowing outside. I was so scared and cold that I crouched in the corner of the bed covered with sheets. In case of being found by the monster which might break into my house, I just kept praying in silent. Finally, I heard my mom calling my name at the front door. I knew I was safe then.

        Since that day, I had never been alone by myself. No matter where my mom went, I always asked her to take me alone. Till one day, my mom thought that her son couldn’t act like a coward for the rest of his life, she told me a story about a lion which was afraid of swimming, and finally hunted by a hunter because it couldn’t make it’s way across the river to escape. I understanded the meaning behind the story. That is, face the fear even if you don’t want to. After that day, I voluntarily stayed at home while my mom had to work. Day by day, I was gradually familiar with myself alone, and sometimes I could even enjoy it. Now, I am no longer fear about loneliness, and I have the faith that I can conquer my difficulty in my rest of life. (268 words) (16)  (314 張慶言)

 

My Biggest Fear--2nd UEE mock exam-2011 spring.doc

P.S. In the attachment are the three essays with the mistakes underlined.